by Denara » Fri Jun 08, 2007 7:23 am
Bruder,
In general, I like it. Great work!
I have a few suggestions that I think might make it even better.
- Make the text bullet points instead of a paragraph (what, where, when, etc)
- Make the "must be 16 to fight" small text under your bullet points
Image suggestions-
- In general images that show people's faces are better (more pleasing to look at) and all 4 of your bottom images have lots of backs of the heads. I would suggest swapping out 1 or 2 of them with a single line of fighters from the front (like a charge)
- I like the top image as a display of what we do - most people in garb, looking like they are having a good time, etc - however, on my monitor it seems a tad out of focus. I am not sure if that is a scaling issue or what.
Denara: Mother to Poison and Thorn
High Guard - Clan of the Hydra